A(bsolutely) Splendiferous ([info]absitively) wrote,
@ 2007-02-04 19:42:00
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Entry tags:any age, fic, gen

I don't know what came over me...
oh dear god. I wrote. like. actually wrote something fictional. Shoot me now, the new allergy meds are making me lose all normal function.
so. Flame away! Though constructive criticism is pretty helpful as well, as I think this is pretty cruddy, but the traitorous logic went, "well dummy, actually share something with other people for once in your nineteen years on this planet." and here we are!


Title: Waltz in C Minor
Gen
Any age
86 words
Notes: um. No copyright infringement? Though I don't even know if it's considered fanfic as it's pretty damn open-ended. Wellllll here goes nothing.

She’s hypnotically waltzing. Floating above the unanchored ground, swirling to three uneven beats, binding herself in a continuous melody of delusion and fantasy. She waltzes in her own glass box.

He’s blindly wishing. Unseeing her ghostly body shuffle over cold tiles, unwanting her slips of silvery foil digging into his clenched hands, unsaying his whispered farewells as she stares with blank eyes. He wishes for the butterfly to emerge from its opaque cocoon to dance in the flowers.

Instead, he watches her dance towards her eulogy.




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[info]_____faith
2007-02-05 03:59 am UTC (link)
Absolutely beautiful imagery ♥

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[info]absitively
2007-02-05 04:19 am UTC (link)
Thanks!

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[info]vexia
2007-02-05 05:05 am UTC (link)
The imagery is quite lovely. It's very vague, very subtle, which is what I love – though at the first glance-over, I have to admit I was a bit confused. In fact, I think I would be lying if I said I understood it. As far as my own interpretation goes, it's all in the last line for me. But there is beauty in not knowing, and that sounds awfully strange, doesn't it?

Though, just one thing: I don't think I would categorise this as 'gen', mainly because I'm sensing undertones of something between the man and woman. I could be wrong, however; I misinterpret things easily.

Anyhow, fantastic work!

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[info]absitively
2007-02-07 02:56 am UTC (link)
You're making me blush. A lot.
Anyway, I read this comment last night and was thinking about it. Because I'm not quite sure if I understand my own fic. I know what I was thinking, but I also know that I wanted it to be really vague and all about the words and phrasing, which I hope came off. And actually, I started with the last line first and based the rest around it.
The thing is, I labeled it gen because (I really hope this doesn't disrupt your ideas and such, you know? Feel free to skip this part if you don't really want to know.) I was thinking of Neville and his mother, but really, it works with a lot of characters, so it could be thought of as a pairing fic as well.
Thanks so much for the comments! ♥

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